HE
Gentle, soft,
Unaware of his presence I sleep,
While he builds up in my soul,
Entwining, groping, growing, crushing...
Piercing me when I am so fragile-
When I put my defences to rest.
Eyes open wide,
To let the day twinkle in the iris of a glass eye,
As the funereal sea rages underneath,
Crashing, destroying, murdering, weeping...
Splattered blood,
Withdrawing under his dominance,
Leaving me a pale monster,
To yellow with age.
He speaks with cold reserve,
His thoughts spilling into the night air,
Whose grace contuses as it brushes against me,
Dwindling as the suns rays tear through the nights drapes,
And oblivious to his presence I move...
Thrashing in the wait to whom I am a slave,
Watching as the gaps grow to reveal empty space,
He accompanies. .
Licking, loving, stabbing, caressing...
He plays.
posted by De.vile at 11:17 AM
16 Comments:
Hey Devile
i am glad u came out of the dungeon of darknes
dis new look is more cheerful
but white font on light pink back ground is difficult to read
do something abt dat dummy
if u want me to read the shit u rote
Love,
Saby
tanks, much better now
ok Chikka nice words but I'm a bit confused to as who the HE is in this poem...pardon my ignorance in undersatnding deep poems like these :)
Keshi.
Awesome !
is dis a fantasy fuck wid the devil ?
keshi: jus annonymous emotions, all those i cant name. so i called them HE.
saby: fantasy fuck? how would i know? an wuts like fuckin in here? crushing? murdering? pale monster?
stabbing?
Hey Devile
wat u intended is immaterial .... all good works of art means diferent tings to different viewers
dat is why u never tire of looking at the same painting or reading the poem again and again
each time u read someting more in it ...
now girl u just rite or paint and leave the rest to us critics .....
Wow.. new look. But I can’t see any pics in the left column. Your blog is not under construction is it right?
Hmmm...
Nice touch.. Thumbs Up Girll!!! Just one more request. How abt adding some more light to the picture.
Peace,
Firacub.
Wonderful De.ville..I like this idea of continous words - Entwining, groping, growing, crushing...Licking, loving, stabbing, caressing...
Im inspired to write something with this technique.:)
more chaotic would have been more wonderful..but yes,this is one of your better ones.I like this line"To let the day twinkle in the iris of a glass eye".
The layout change is kinda superfluous.*smiles*but if it suits ya...
ashes prefers to see u in a dungeon
evil ppl prefer darkness
day light scares dem
i told ya dis guy is evil ... make dat in CAPS
duh annonymous is Saby...the word CAPS says it all...still mucking ard anonymously ha? not good...come out and say it in style...Ash is a wonderful guy and the fact that he has many friends n not u. should not make u feel jealous...he writes well too...so stop writing rude stuff abt him Saby - basically get a life.
Keshi.
Hey devile
y does evry body hate a nice guy ?
all the creeps who rite rude stuff is being attributed to me
Lord, help me
they wanna crucify me too
I love the feeling of intensity in your writing. Like the moment described has its own inertia. Its own flow. Oblivious to the players involved. Like it should be.
saby quit doin that shit. if someone got to be nuts, let em be. i like crazies cuz i am one. cept u. ur just well freaky. but i still didnt block u did i? so jus shut up an critize THE material IN HERE NOT an not i repeat NOT the people who come in here. ty rexy, ur words jus blew my head to new proportions. not that im complainin...
haha,the great thing is.It doen't bother me in the least when I am called evil and other things.To take it with a pinch of salt,I do prefer darkness over sunlight anyday..aesthetically speaking.
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